Its so cold

In class, we do a cold task to find out what we already know. Our cold task was on narrative writing. This is a snapshot of what I can do in 30 minutes by myself.

We are learning to self-assess our writing so we know what we are good at and what we need to work on.

What I want to in prove in my work is to use better punctuation and to show not tell.

Name: Calaya

It was the holidays, I and my cousin were messaging each other. 

I decided it was a good idea to go pick her up on the quad and my sister. When we arrived at her house she said “ill get my quad we’ll have a race “I agreed.

 So she asked if my sister wanted to hop on her with her and if her sister will hop on with me. We were riding up and down her road until she tried to do sideways on it. We were already halfway to her house until my cousin looked back and saw they had flipped. 

I rushed back to them, we were freaked out. My cousin and sister were under the bike, that wasn't a good moment.  At that point, the man living on the corner had seen everything. He came running out and pushed the bike up from them. My cousin that was under the bike said 

“go get my dad please”

I quickly rushed to get her dad,  my uncle. He was there in no time. He was mad. I followed him back up to them on the bike. By the time I got to them, they were alright. My cousin got taken to the hospital a few minutes after.

She was crying that she might have broken her arm, sure enough, she did. Later that day I went home to see if my sister was alright. She had a big hole in her elbow, it was disgusting. My nan took her to the doctor to wrap her arm 

A few months later I went to visit her asking if she was allowed to come but it was, of course, a no. Since that day my cousins aren't allowed to ride or hop on a bike with us ever again. But that's a memory from their scars they say.

The mystery shapes.

 Yesterday we got given a task sheet to complete with a partner and see if we knew what some of the clues meant and see if we knew what we were doing.

Forgiveness

 We have been learning about forgiving people.

Do not judge, and you will not be judged. Do not condemn, and you will not be condemned. Forgive, and you will be forgiven. Luke 6:37

   I learned something new because this is a new story to me.

Random Story Line

 My class read hatchet but I missed days so I wrote this.

One day, long long ago a girl named Faith ran away from her family for a very long time. They had no idea where or who she could be with or where she would be. They searched for her everywhere but she wasn't seen, until one day they put posters up about her all around town. Some random lady came running up to Faith's mum, Faith's mum introduced herself  “Hi my name is Nila'' the lady looked scared she said okay but I saw some man with your daughter.  The lady was holding a  picture of Faith saying she saw her with a man putting her in the back of his boot. Nila freaked out; she had no idea that it was Faith.  Faith's mum was frightened. So there was the clue, she had been kidnapped.

That lady that saw Faith get kidnapped had a picture in her mind of the man and of what his car looked like. So that lady helped Nila look for her. They quickly jumped in the car and went looking around town. The lady had spotted the man's car and told Nila “drive faster drive faster’ i see his car. They caught up to him in traffic but he drove away, zooming past all the cars. Nila got his number plate to his car so they knew it was his car. The lady saw his car parked up at a dead-end road, Nila pulled over next to him he was suspicious.

The man jumped out of his car all masked up, Nila and the lady jumped out of their car too. Nila screamed at him “ give my daughter back! “ He tried to quickly jump in his car but Nila grabbed him. The lady came running over to his car, grabbed his keys, and quickly got Faith out of the boot. Faith was scared when she jumped out but Nila held on to the man and put him in the boot, shut the boot, and left him there. Nila gave Faith a huge hug and said “let's get out of here” They all jumped in the car and took off. Nila thanked the lady for helping find Faith, and the lady said “no worries”.

Nila dropped the lady off at her house and asked for her number. The lady said, “I'm glad I saw you around and helped find your daughter.” Nila couldn't be much happier. Nila went home and spent time with Faith but didn't question her why she left. It was a few weeks later until Nila rang that same lady and asked to hang out, the lady was pleased to say yes of course. Nila and the lady became very close friends. Nila took Faith to see all her family, they were all happy to see her. Nila asked Faith if she wanted to sleep there, she of course said yes. They had a family feast and made beds in the sitting room. Later through the year I got a call from a random number, I answered it and they told me the lady that helped me find faith passed away.

Story time

  This term we are learning about narrative writing. Some things I have been learning about is to show not tell and narratives.                    

                                     End of the world Orientation. Setting & characters 

 It was a sunny afternoon and skyscrapers, hotels, buildings, and highways were full of green grass and weeds around the whole city. Animals were running around a lonely city and birds were chirping through the sky. I fell out of a plane into the lonely city of New York and lay there wondering where I am in the world. 

 A box came thundering out of a long tower and stuff came gambling out of it. I picked up this strange thing out of the box and it was telling me something. I heard strange noises coming from the sky so I began to run. Out came this big flying robot from the corner of the buildings it came following me. I ran to the motorbike and began to take off. I

 went through the forest, the robot came gambling through the bushes, and out came the animals running around. I came to an end and decided to jump onto the robot so I wouldn't have fallen off the cliff. The robot went crashing down into the desert and I jumped out and walked around to see if anyone was there. I yelled “hello hello” to anyone there. I was finally there.

 In class, we have been learning about courage. We had to choose a quote that we like and create a motivational poster about it. I like this quote because I do something and then work on it then I get better and better at it.

I learned how to that a good poster is eye-catching and has a purpose. In mind, I learned how to use different colors and fonts in my work. This was easy-ish to cooperate with. 

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